Thursday, November 8, 2007

Golden Sun

Rahul here,

Heres a haiku I've made when writting this I recalled a conversation of the sun ending all life oneday and I came up with this. The sense of this haiku is that we look at the sun as a symbol of life but even this gigantic figure with has been around for BILLIONS of years must one day die.

Even golden sun,
Fiery and bright with life,
Must some day burn out.
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3 comments:

ENG3U Student said...

Nice haiku Rahul, but the line "Fiery and bright with life," doesn't really appeal to me because although fiery seems like a life-like trait, bright doesn't seem to reflect life too much. Other than that, nice haiku.

- David Jeong

November 9, 2007 at 5:10 PM
ENG3U Student said...

i really loved your haiku rahul. even though david said "bright" does not reflect the traits of life, i kind of disagree. (ur still awesome david) i can totally see someone's personality shining brightly. i think "bright" can be a very "alive" adjective. the only thing is that the second line is missing a syllable. but that's ok! :D
-cathy

November 10, 2007 at 10:17 PM
ENG3U Student said...

Rahul,

Great haiku. Don't worry too much about the syllable count. Something makes me think that you wanted the first line to read "Even the golden sun" instead of what you actually have there. There is no need to sacrifice meaning and grammar for the proper syllable length in a line.

Throw that "the" back in there and you've got an awesome haiku!

Cheers,
Mr. G

November 11, 2007 at 2:04 PM

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