Heyy guys here another one of my haikus i hope you can give me some input...i created it courtesy of the Prisms of poetry for inspiration since they mention thinking of bees and stars relation and i thought OMG thats soo true they are quite the same hope you like it=)
Yellow and Black in colour
A Bee high in the sky
Replaced by stars at night time
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hey! i love this haiku. greaaat use of colour to show imagery. it was quite vivid. your syllable count in lines 1 and 2 are a bit off, but i think haikus do have some flexibility in terms of counting syllables. great job!
Melanie,
Great idea. I saw those exercises in Prisms but didn't think they would be very useful. You've proved me wrong!
I really like your word choice with "replaced".
-Mr. G
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