Hey guyss by the title you should know who this is, welll anyways, this is Melanie with her adorable princess Nirushyka and together we thought of this poem...it may seem simple but trust me....we got off into a daze. BTW, we will post another one of our favorites in a while...i just learned how to use this thangg=) hopee youu enjoy it babess...ii luv u guys ilke a beaver luvzz woodd=)
A Dream
A prince on a horse
gallops into the palace
with my glass slipper.
-Nirushyka K. & Melanie S.
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Nirushyka and Melanie,
An interesting haiku. I hope this was not all you learned about dreams at your workshop yesterday!
You might really surprise the reader by changing the title to Cinderella and by changing the "glass slipper" to something unexpected. Just a suggestion.
Regards,
Mr. G
hey! i really liked your haiku. i agree with mr.G, maybe the title should be Cinderella beacause that was the first thing that popped into my head.
oh yeah that was Bagavathy by the way :D
Nice haiku :D
but i think "slipper" would be better understood if it were shoe or something. It didn't remind me of Cinderella when you said slipper. :(
Well other than that, nice poem :D
- David Jeong
oh gosh david. it would obviously be a guy who would say "slipper does not remind me of cinderella"
every girl knows "glass slipper"= cinderella! anyways, i loved this poem you guys. it was so sweeeeet! after reading it, i departed for 5 minutes into my own little fantasy world. dont we all wish a prince no a horse could come to us with our glass slipper?? sigh...
oh btw, the above was only something cathy would say.
oh and btw, my first comment was supposed to be "don't we all wish a prince WITH a horse..."
a typo... silly ol' cathy...
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